Friday 23 May 2008

The end of summer

He’d been seeing her for a month now.
Though he had difficulty remembering the night they met, he felt he could remember every moment of his life since then.
Juddering, sensual moments in her company; anxious tedious times without her. Each second of this month seemed engraved upon his mind, and would be forever after.
Long summer nights spent wrapped together. Closeness, he always wanted her nearby, despite the humidity and the natural heat. She told him once that she liked to sweat. She told him everything he’d ever wanted a woman to tell him.
And, on balconied mornings, watching the sun rise over the city, he’d open himself up to her, pouring it all free, bathing her in himself to see if she could stand it.
When she went, his sweat would turn cold. His mind raced with fear. Would she return that evening? Why would she come back? Why did she ever have to leave?
That evening he resolved to remedy this issue. His was a turbulent mind, but within it he saw a straight line heading towards clarity and followed it there. Followed it to the roof terrace with a glass of 30 year old Macallan in hand, sullied by a single ice-cube.
When she arrived, she followed his hand-drawn paper signs and arrows, through the apartment and out onto the roof terrace.
The garden was blooming with lavender and hydrangea bushes, the drone of insects was louder than the traffic, up there in the clouds.
He said he had something important to ask her, so she sat upon a low brick wall. She lit two cigarettes, one for each of them, though he set his down on the brickwork.
Then he poured himself upon her once more. He gushed, he cried a little, he got on bended knee before his proposal was done.
And she accepted, with crystalline tears streaking her own beaming face. They stood and embraced as the sun dropped lower behind the skyscrapers.
They talked and drank for the rest of the night, though she said she couldn’t stay with him - she needed to go home. To go home and pick up some things. She could not be dissuaded.
He held onto her company for as long as he could. She unclasped herself around 3am.
The CCTV cameras in the lift recorded her face, smiling broadly for the entire duration of her ride to the ground floor.
One also recorded the moment when her face turned to horror, upon the opening of the lift doors onto the lobby. A different camera watched as one gunshot pierced her breast, and another struck her temple.
Her fiancé, high up in the penthouse, was already sweating without her near. He had resolved to go after her, to retrieve her and he was already punching the button to call the elevator.
He was already watching so eagerly as the blessed machine joyously counted the floors - up, up, up - up to his high apartment.

7 comments:

Sucharita Sarkar said...

I caught up reading your stories this week today as I was out of town and internet orbit.

This story deals such a cruel blow to the already-shaky hopes of the man...but then, you are the omniscient narrator, you can play God to your characters. (reminded me somewhat of Katherine Mansfield's THE FLY...though the context is completely different).

Or did I read it wrong, and the man had something to do with the woman's death?

Svetlana said...

oh i get it now! beautifully done.

Aleta said...

When I read your stories, I have such high hopes for the characters that mayhap this time there will be a happy ending. It's the polly-anna in me, what can I say? You would think I would have learned my lesson by now with having read so much of your works.

Natalie said...

What inspired you to write that story? I sounds like some of my perverted fantasies or a nightmare. Unfortunately, it is very realistic...
But my question remains :o)
Natalie

bha said...

forgot to mention - the mods to the code will change past posts as well, but as you've seen, it will only do the first paragraph (since the html code in older posts lacks the paragraph tags).

Indenting more than the first paragraph is where most of the trickiness lies. If you followed the steps after modding the layout code (the big step 3), it should work...it's easy to screw that up though.

Let me know if that section made sense to you.

The surest way to get all paragraphs indented is to manually surround each paragraph in the html edit with the < p > < /p > tags.

Tedious, but if you do it for one post we can verify that the layout code is correct (which I think it is).

If you want to leave older posts alone, I might be able to come up with a workaround for that. I'll look into it.

bha said...

On this story:
Sucks to be them.

I'm trying to integrate this with the other scotch, and with the lobby shootings...now I'm just wondering about the killer & the speaker in what I'm interpreting as the first part of this.

So many possibilities on who's who and what the connection is.

bha said...

Oops, I only just read the motherlode story...now it makes more sense.

But still so many questions...