At street level, everything is different.
The cars whiz by like they’re trying to achieve take-off. The people zoom about like they have mere seconds to live and need to achieve their personal goals, before calamity.
She walks among them. Quite different, a purposeful stepper, stalking among the trees and bushes as she deftly moves in the direction of her target.
Spying a man waiting at a crossing, she is almost upon him when she feigns a small trip. He moves to grab her, to halt her fall. She reaches her arm about him. She peers up at him, smile prepared, no matter what he looks like. She is confident in her beauty, her radiance. It will take him in like any other.
Somehow, in that split-second, in that Gorgon-glare, she is able to reach inside the pocket of his jacket and retrieve the wallet that is bulkily protruding.
She pockets it herself as the man helps her upright. The unspoken code of personal space already broken, the man feels free to touch this woman a little more, brushing lightly at her coat as though it might somehow have gotten dirty during their collision.
Another smile, this time with a brush of the hair. Magical pheromones must dance from her curls, because the man can do nothing now but beam at her, this woman he’s saved.
Can he buy her a coffee? No. Thank you, but no. She is busy and has an appointment she must reach.
Perhaps he can split a taxi with her? After all, he has caused her lateness! (What lateness? It’s been a matter of seconds since they met!)
No, thanks all the same, but she is merely a few blocks from where she is headed.
She thanks him and bids him a good day. He shakes his head as he watches her cross the road. He can’t believe she’s walking away. Walking away from this fate, this kismet.
She can’t believe she let him look at her face for that long. Idiot! Amateur! She is chastising herself and picks up the pace. Ducking around a corner, she decides to get into a taxi after all. She feels like distance between the mark and her is what is required now.
‘Downtown’ is her spoken destination. The cabbie nods. She has no money on her person, but for whatever she finds in the kind man’s wallet.
She opens it, impatiently. It is stuffed with twenties. She allows herself, at last, a smile. She may be getting sloppy, but her instincts are still strong.
She sits back now, crosses her legs and plays with the hem of her skirt. Confident again, she’ll flirt with the taxi driver now, from here until her apartment.
5 comments:
Very nice. Not only is this well-described, etc., the anonymous pickpocketer also seems very human. The playing with the skirt part just got me. I don't know how, or why . . . it made her seem like an innocent schoolgirl. Very well done.
i found this post nice too. [:)]
lets come to your question. honestly, i think there are two mutually exclusive and exhaustive elements to any creation (writing, painting, singing, etc.) ...Subject & Technique. Originality of the creator depends on how he choses on both of these. It's easier to create newer techniques then to create newer subjects. Comments of general readers, as i think, depend more on the technique... as technique is the first of the two they get to notice: like, ..choice of words, way of narration, twists and turns... whatever be the subject, it's the treatment that keeps them glued to the text till they've finished reading.
i think, creating different subjects is more tough, because, in any way, we all live in a world that is too monotonous along Space and Time. Here comes in the concepts of Fairytales, sci-flics, etc. I read all three of the links you provided. Perhaps they resemble what I was trying to say.
Personally, I feel it's most challenging to write on an abnormal subject with a normal technique. Normal technique - because to make it straight across the readers. Now, the question is, ..what to create to fill in the gaps of reality that we are all seeing since time immemorial. [:D]
IS THERE ANYTHING ELSE OTHER THAN IMAGINATION? ..TO TRY AND CEMENT VARIOUS STRIPS OF REALITY TOGETHER ..TO MAKE UP A STORY WITH A SUBJECT THAT NO ONE HAS EVER SEEN OR HEARD OF.. BUT EVERYONE CAN RELATE TO.
(quite a long comment! hehe. [:D] check this out if you manage time.. www.myabstracthometown. blogspot.com ..comments are disabled though! [:D])
ah, beautiful women can just get away with murder, can't they, lol?!
thankyou for your reply
oh dear thats a shame
you can take a look on my blog if you go down a few post its the last painting
you'll know what i mean when you see it haha
I love that your not afraid to tell of the bad people, of the grifting,
and ditto petruchio, the playing of skirt got me too.
The realism is great, I mean, the world isint a bushel of unicorns and sunsets and greenery.
Lots of Love,
Age xoxoxoxo
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