Monday 28 April 2008

Night Terror

Always, Jim would try to hold on.
Sometimes he'd be outside of himself, running down the hill underneath the fly-over. He could see hands grasping, white and twitching and his own head trying to peep over the parapet: the concrete and seashell composite wall, the thick crash barrier.
And as he strained with all his might to force himself, by sheer intensity of will, to almost psychically power more strength into the weary arms of the Jim on the wall, he would always trip and stumble forward. He would then roll, roll, roll down the hill until his head collided and burst against the concrete wall; a wall that had saved many a motorist from plunging into the cold river, far below.
As soon as Jim's vision faded, as soon as a veil was drawn across the eyes of the self that had careered head-first towards a blunt head-trauma, he would be there inside the other body. Switched and slipping from the other side of the skull-splattered crash barrier, looking alternately at feeble fingers and whirling waters.
Inevitably, he'd cry out and fall with that sickness – remember the first drop of your first roller-coaster ride – and, as in dreams of this kind, panic overtakes his body long before it reaches whatever awaits below.
And there wakes Jim, in a dark room, in a soaking bed, still clawing at the covers for any handhold that might have saved him.
He starts to relax. After a few moments, at least, he is calm again. Jim lies flat on his back, his body feels so heavy. He notices his fiancé stirring beside him.
She rolls over onto her side, she is used to his nightmares now.
There comes, then, a scratching. A small noise, of tapping, perhaps, like the claws of a rat. Then comes creaking. It is the floorboards on the landing outside; they always creak like that.
The scritching is louder now, close to the bedroom door. It sounds as if something is slithering along, or is being dragged across rough carpet. The floorboards creak again, and then so does the door.
It's time to sit up; to get up and investigate. But Jim can't move his arm to prop himself up, and no amount of forceful instruction from his brain is causing his leg muscles to so much as twitch. The only part of his body that seems to be engaged is his optic nerve and the muscles which allow the movement of his eye.
The door is open fully. Jim can see more of the room now that his eyes have adjusted to both its darkness and its hints of light. Something is shuffling, scraping and pawing at the foot of his bed. He can hear it, it is breathing. A horrible, rasping whine like its lungs are thick with mucus.
Paroxysms of terror, apoplexy, catatonia.
Jim is so gripped as a form as strange and shapeless as the cloak of night hauls itself upon his useless legs. The darkness has hair and drags itself across his body with a weight that crushes Jim, like he's sinking deep into the bed.
Then hands push upon his face and his neck. The thing is propped upright, its full weight bearing down upon his chest.
How can he breath, how can his heart beat with this burden upon him?
Strange wisps of hair pass away and hints of a face are revealed. Repulsive, shredded, hanging; repellent in every way, all Jim's senses are straining against this creature.
And it just stays there, on his chest, sapping his strength, rising his panic. He can't quite believe this has happened again. How long now, before it ends? 'Til his body is his own once more?
His eyes flick, so wide with desperation, across to his fiancé, across for salvation. She is sleeping, so placidly, so peacefully, as always.
Oh, and how he hated her then.

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9 comments:

Jaquanda Rae said...

I like the last line a lot. I like "story" more than "commentary" though both are intertwined at times.

Sucharita Sarkar said...

This reminds of Poe once again, only there the horrible creature sapping sleep was real, not a phantasmagoria. And the last line reminded me of Robert Browning's MY LAST DUCHESS, with its implied contrast between the tortured/twisted male and the serene/innocent female, and the jealousy this engenders.

Aleta said...

I thought it was a fascinating story and made me think of some friends who have the paralyzed feeling after they have dreamt something and then wake up but cannot move the body. When you dream, your body is paralyzed, otherwise you would physically act out your dreams (to this day, I still sleep walk, darn scary if you ask me! I actually called my boyfriend while I was sleep walking and don't remember getting up, walking through the house to the sofa to call him and then back to bed) Anyway, a lot of people go through the "left over paralyzed affect" from a dream and I imagine the anxiety that came come from it - you penned it well! Enjoyed!

Svetlana said...

dreams are powerful stuff. i'm happy i don't have many, or i don't remember them. i'm happy that way. very happy indeed.

Anonymous said...

That is a very fine and detailed picture to paint just to accompany a short blog! That is somekind of mad hoss in the background there, some kind of crazy devil-horse,pity he doesn't really come into the story.

Really though nice work I like the idea. And of course the finish is (as with many of your daily tales it seems) the best bit. Nothing can quite explain the extreme frustration of 'looking' at someone else who is peacefully sleeping at a time like that but you managed to evoke it a bit so well in.

tina said...

vivid descriptions as usual :) the pacing is just right. and the last line nails it.

this tale reminds me of my own nightmares, the ones that leave me awake for several tense minutes after being jolted back into consciousness. minus the shade, and the fiance. :)

bha said...
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bha said...

On a similar note, only a week apart we covered the incubus theme. Funny. I also included an image in the post linked at the bottom.

The dream in this one is interesting to me, put lots of strange ideas in my head (like body switching as each one is destroyed an unlimited number of times into new bodies. like an avalanche).

You've written this guy's perspective during sleep-paralysis very well. I can just imagine being awake and helpless while a monstrosity visits...

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bha said...

Thanks for the commentary.

The point to point thing was basically what you thought. During that song I put my hand over my mouth and got that suffocation image in mind.

I'm a big NIN fan these days...I think Reznor peaked at Downward spiral, but including what are effectively B-sides on the Fragile (Right) may have made it less cohesive for some - by itself, I find Left is a pretty solid album.

My favorite since then was Year Zero (largely from a conceptual standpoint), then Ghosts was a neat experiment. Even before Ghosts though, I'd been thinking about crossing media boundaries (that's what my vignettes were originally about).